tell me what do u think about my new song 2024

! Hello everyone
? How R U doing

I wrote a newww song guys
all by my self of course…somedays ago
but now I’m still working on the melodies
: Here R the words of the song " On my own "

Today , I will go on my own
Sorry..but I just can’t live anymore

Sorry cause I decided to go away
Don’t think there’s a reason for me to stay

Today , I’ll go on my own
Sorry..but I just can’t live anymore

I can’t even smell , life ‘ s got no taste
I only see the dark in my face
I think I lost my smile forever
Don’t ask me to walk together
? Where could I get back my smile
No , I must leave even I’ve gotta walk miles

And today , yes today , I will go on my own
Sorry but I just can’t live anymore

?? How could U B that heartless
No , I can’t work with this..
I’ll go to somewhere , someworld , someplace..to be free
? I’m always sad , can’t U see

So I packed my bags and goodbye
I’ll try to live and maybe fly
I’ll try to find my love and rest
I’ll try to take my self always into the best

…So I will go
Wonder if we’ll meet again
wonder if I’m gonna live…and love..

So from now on , I will go on my own
So sorry..but I can’tive like that anymore

Ohhh…I can’t live anymore
…

?? sooo..what do U think
I hope U liked it
I’m waiting 4 your answers